Peer Response 1, Final Week: Diamond

First of all, your first sentence reminds me of a T-shirt one would get at small attraction: "I went to Ruby Falls and all I got was this shirt." Immediately caught my attention. Secondly, I agree with Jenna that the journey, or walking through the thrift store, would add a great amount of detail and "meaning" to your essay. Show us how your child-like mind came to pick up this particular item. What did you bypass to get to this bowl? Third, I find the price written in sharpie to be interesting. If you are attempting to apply definition to this "candy dish," what does "15 cents" marked in Sharpie do to this? I'd like to see you juggle this idea in as well. Fourth, you start to flesh out your reflection extremely well, but then I become lost in the idea that you want to become this bowl. Like Jenna, I'm not completely convinced that you "desperately" want to understand its history. Maybe flesh this out a little more to convey the desperation of your speaker and lose "desperately." Fifth, when your mother makes that blanketed statement, who is she talking to? Does this play any importance? If she is talking to another mother, does this reinforce your want to understand how the bowl came to collect so much dust?