Response to Melissa Sullivan's Memory 2, Week 2 - Week 1

I really enjoyed your incorporation of the knightly mannerisms shared between Chip and Brian. I think it sets up this unique connection between these two characters and allows your readers an interesting insight to how you see these two people. If you continue this avenue, I would be careful when juggling not to become too emotional since your husband is involved and Brian seems to be hurt and in the hospital, I believe. (Not sure. Only detail we are given is the fact that a cell phone is not allowed on the premises.) By possibly offering a historical "ball" to be juggled, the high emotions could be counterbalanced smoothly. I am particularly curious to know as to why “Kona” or Brian hids his face from “Lord Chip.” Is he ashamed of his “battle wounds” or weakness? Is it out of pride or embarrassment? Depending upon the reason, I think you could definitely highlight historically how proud the knights were to keep the emotions cool. I also find it interesting how your husband refers to him as Kona rather than by his real name. You could even play with the idea of reality vs. imaginary. What is real between these two people and what is not? How else could you incorporate this theme? I think that would be an extremely interesting twist.